99%的考生都不知道！让雅思考官吐血的作文开头大盘点（上）

知道为什么你的雅思写作分低么？为什么学习了那么多技巧却无用武之地？用了好多华丽辞藻高分模板仍是万年5.5？
很有一种可能就是你的开头就让雅思考官看了就毫无阅读欲望、愤然扣分!今天就看看那些考官看了想打人、想吐血的十种开头吧!
一、中式英语
讨厌指数：★★★★★
上榜理由：用中式英文开头，不仅会让考官看不懂，还暴露了你的语言功底，语料积累匮乏，是雅思写作中的大忌。
比如：
写作主题 1：The happiest moment in your life
案例：In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……
写作主题 2：The population problem
案例：The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.
写作主题 3：Is there fairness in today’s business world?
案例：I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……
二、胡乱翻译中国俗语
讨厌指数：★★★★★
上榜理由：胡乱翻译中国俗语会起反作用，毕竟考官对中国俗语并不“感冒”，反而会引起考官反感。
比如：
写作主题 1：Is it good to have a large family?
案例：I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……
写作主题 2：Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/her family?
案例：Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rat’s son can make hole……
写作主题 3：The advantage of being a nice person
案例：I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese people always say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”.
三、啰里啰嗦抓不住重点
讨厌指数：★★★★☆
上榜理由：开篇就要主题明了清晰，上来就啰啰嗦嗦表达不清，考官自然认为你的观点模糊，甚至不会表达。
比如：
写作主题 1：Should college students be allowed to get married?
案例：This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……
写作主题 2：Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information?
案例：Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.
四、偏离主题
讨厌指数：★★★★☆
上榜理由：文不对题自然会扣分，给考官留下的印象就是跑题，想想整体写作分数还会高么?
比如：
写作主题：It is said that nowadays one can‘t acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
案例：I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.
五、观点不明朗
讨厌指数：★★★☆☆
上榜理由：雅思大作文很重要的一点就是你的逻辑性和观点，如果观点都不明确，后面的举例证明等都会缺乏说服力，自然分数也不会高。
比如：
写作主题：Should college students be allowed to get married?
案例：I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little,only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……
 
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